Kathy L Wheeler here again: Here's a little brainstorming thing in all it's unformatted, misspellings, no punctuation immediacy. Most of it was tossed out from the onset, but it's still fun to see where something started compared to how it came out for A Bullet in the Heart.
When jo is out for her walk, Bobby comes in, not Jackson. He tells L &F the news that he and Jo are getting married. That should be the hook into chapter 2.
Jo meets Roger Jr and they talk. Roger tells her that he doesn’t believe that Victor fell over that side of the ferry. Roger feels Victor knew something that got him killed.
Jo hurries back to the house to tell her sisters this astounding news but when she walks in:
1) Bobby is there?
a. He puts Jo on the spot in front of the others; she is furious and makes him leave (remember there is a rooming house in town)
2) Bobby is not there:
a. The girls tell Jo they know her secret; she’s shocked, but then they are truly excited to learn she’s engaged. She is dumbfounded and tells them they are mistaken.
Bobby does not know that Eleanor is there, he followed Jo.
Victor learned that Mary had gone to see Eleanor
Bobby saw Mary, worried what Victor knew and killed him.
Bobby was terrorizing Eleanor?
Bobby threatened Mary, Eleanor heard him, but he couldn’t get a clear path to Eleanor to off her. So in the end, Eleanor knows that Bobby killed Mary, but while in the asylum, Eleanor was kept drugged on a regular basis, so most of what she knows just comes across as nightmares to her.
Kathy L Wheeler (aka Kae Elle Wheeler) loves the NFL, the NBA, musical theater (don't ask how her how many times she's seen Phantom of the Opera (12); or Wicked (7)), travel, (Europe, Grand Cayman, Mexico, All over the US), reading (practically a book a night), writing (15 books and counting) and karaoke (well....what can she say). She assists other authors in critiquing, formatting, and creating covers for their publishing dreams. She writes contemporary and historical stories where the heroines save themselves and the heroes who honor their courage with suspense and humor.